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句会実験9.選句リスト（最初に haiku のみを列記）

投稿者：ryo 投稿日：2009年 3月 3日(火)15時57分48秒

今回、外国人５名も含めて、１４人の参加者でした。最初に haiku のみを列記しました。後の方に、同じ番号を使って「日本語での説明部分」を列記しております。ご自分の２句を外して、次のリストの中から、それぞれの方が５句を選んで下さい。　例えば、 3）today’s clouds 5）ruins　 13）after the rain 16) children 21) baby toddles このように書いて、その結果を私の方へお送りください。出来ましたら、選句のコメントを書いてください。締めきりは　　　4月５日まで。なお、選句の際は、特に英語の句、眼で読むだけでなく、声を出して読んでみてください。リズム感は haiku の場合でも重要だと思います。 1) in line at the post office― the pimple behind his right ear 2) dancing of light through red leaves 3) today’s clouds parents and children 4) blinding rain a car’s tail lights guide me home 5) ruins in rome moss 6) the shape of her breath on a crisp cold day 7) frozen moon through naked tree 8) the sound of gardener’s trimming― food-searching cat 9) day’s end brightly colored fishing boats bottoms up 10) between cracks daylight slips through 11) shaking the wind smell droop a plum flower 12) hurry home― twinkle of an evening star in this cold wave 13) after the rain walk along the alley a fragrance of winter daphne 14) naked cherry trees― end of those branches cherry hue 15) February for the sky lengthening an airplane a cloud 16) children running about an icy day 17) butterbur flower stalks! the bitter taste brings spring 18) cast-off of cicada― plum blossoms in full bloom 19) above the grave circle of singing birds 20) In the dead of night A robin sings heartily Under a street lamp 21) baby toddles step by step with all her strength 22) winter night little lizard on the wall 23) The hollow brick's secret A cluster of garden snails Sealed in their shells 24) sudden spring wind the tress blown up quiet afternoon 25) many flowers blooming during rainy season 26) a lady still anxious to trim a pure camellia 27) solitary tree casts long shadow moonlit evening 28) old farm house white to green hue - changing seasons 888888888888888888 ryo 88888888888888888

句会実験の英訳コメント（その２)

投稿者：ryo 投稿日：2008年11月29日(土)14時02分43秒

[[4votes]] mountain passage the man with the machete and me Gene= Mike Kosiba=- the unknown man adds a nice hint of mystery Maria= The space which the person owns with a stranger apart from each other at the mountain passage; the smell of green; a touch of pathos―I can feel those things and I think this haiku is simple and profound. Kurosawa= I feel something like a story about a man who lives with nature. From this viewpoint, this haiku is interesting. ##### This haiku is written by Mykel Board. [[3votes]] the blue between clouds its smallness and its pureness Toshio= This reminds me of a kind nurse with deep clear eyes. Hayashi= The clear blue sky appeared for an instant―I feel its depth as if I were swallowed up. Kitamura= I’m sure the writer likes to look up at the sky. ##### This haiku is written by ryo [[3votes]] forces from nowhere blows everywhere wind Mike Moran= The wind is alive - invisible but powerful Kurosawa= The strength and impartiality of nature. I feel something like a young man. ryo= I am interested in the expressions, “from nowhere” and “blows everywhere”. ##### This haiku is written by Jun [[3votes]] only the quiet and the lengthening of shadows lovers embrace Sone= What do the “shadows” and “the quiet” suggest, when one scene in a monochrome movie was shot a close-up? Kubodera= It is as if I were seeing a movie scene. Ian= The approaching evening isolates this couple from the rest of the world. ##### This haiku is written by Gene [[3votes]] Three old apple trees Windfall fruit slowly rotting Smell of vinegar Gene= Mykel Board= This is delightful, first because of its originality: NOT an ADJECTIVE NOUN (e.g. old pond) first line, and the use of "windfall fruit," unusual words, but immediately understandable. Usually I don't like 5-7-5, but here it seems very natural. I also like it because of the sensory allusion to Basho's "sound of water." (smell of vinegar). It echoes without being too obvious. It's a great haiku. Taguchi= ##### This haiku is written by Ian [[1vote]] autumn breeze- turning around the moon bubbles on the water Akai= I see the scene of the moon in the heaven, bubbles on the earth, and between them autumn breeze is reigning nature quietly and peacefully. ##### This haiku is written by masoumeh [[1vote]] spray paint signs the sky Kubodera= This relaxes and refreshes me. ##### This haiku is written by Mike Kosiba

句会実験の英訳コメント（その１）

投稿者：ryo 投稿日：2008年11月29日(土)13時51分26秒

今回、句会実験に参加された外国人へ、送るための英訳コメントをご紹介いたします。 "kukai on the Internet 8"/ result I’m pleased to inform you the result of the "kukai on the Internet 8". If you give me your comment and suggestion on our “kukai”, I’ll appreciate it. Probably we’ll be able to have the next “kukai” about 5~6 months later. --------------------------------------- Ryo Suzuki <haiku-eg@nifty.com> <http://homepage2.nifty.com/haiku-eg/> --------------------------------------- [[12 votes]] listening to the rain a rose Nakamura= I can imagine the petals of a rose wet with rain. I’m impressed. masoumeh = I like its simplicity and beauty. A rose is like a poet here. Anamizu= I like the writer’s feeling that the rose is listening to the rain when he/she sees the rose like bending a little in the rain. In my imagination I can clearly see a rose and raindrops on the gray background. It’s as if I’m looking at a picture. Nakayama= I can imagine a rose in the room, and the writer has a quiet and fulfilling time. Mykel Board = This one is minimal, but deep. The lack of punctuation lends the depth. At first, it seems that the haiku writer is listening to the rain, then suddenly notices the rose. But it could also be the rose, listening to the rain in its own way. M. Moran = A sombre and reflective moment. The rose provides contrast to the falling rain. Sone= This is a bright haiku because of the freshness of a rose wet in the rain and the sound of rain. Harada= A rose goes well with the sound of rain. Iwamoto= I can imagine a fresh rose. Maria= This haiku is very simple and I can imagine a scene ( a piece of picture). A rose is on top of a table of a dimly-lit room. Only that spot is a little bright and quiet sound of rain outside. Kubodera= The fragrance of a rose is floating in the smell of wet rain. Yamamoto= ##### This haiku is written by ryo [[7 votes]] asleep at the beach on my chest my book outlined in sunburn Gene= Anamizu= It’s interesting because I can imagine the humorous situation. Nakayama= This summer was very hot, and I was very busy avoiding sunburn. The book’s outline on white skin would be a problem. However, it is interesting. Kitamura= I’m interested in the book’s outline, not the trace of the swimsuit. Jun=The lure of summer is irresistible for someone who works hard during the regular time of the year. In such a situation, reading an interesting book becomes secondary to the joy that one wallows in like getting baked under the sun, and leaving the book either on one’s chest or face. In this fast-paced society, indeed one needs the time to take off from stress-laden work in order to relax and enjoy the fruits of one’s labor. Taguchi= ryo= On this beach, I suppose the writer is enjoying a nice breeze rather than suffering from the heat. ##### This haiku is written by Mykel Board. [[7 votes]] august heat littering the beach jelly fish Mykel Board= An interesting change in perception. Too many haiku are only pretty pictures. Nature is nice. But here we see nature as "litter," not nice. A very original point of view. Harada= I was rescued from the August heat by the jelly fish. Mike Kosiba= “Litter” in a haiku - GREAT! Iwamoto= I’m interested in the writer’s mention of jelly fish. It takes our minds off of the August heat. Taguchi= Ian= Jellyfish, which once moved gracefully in the sea, now lie helpless on the sand. ryo= I feel the summer heat more because of the jelly fish scattered on the beach. ##### This haiku is written by Gene [[7 votes]] on the stone pavement stone-still cicada late in summer Nakamura= From this haiku, I remember Basho’s haiku; quietness― sinking into the rock a cicada’s cry After I read this haiku, I also feel heat from the sound and from my body. Gene= Mykel Board= Again we don't start ADJECTIVE NOUN first line. (All too common in English-language haiku).　Again we have an allusion to a famous haiku, this one about the sound of a cicada coming from a rock. But this is different. NOT from the rock, but from the pavement. NOT a sound, but a cicada without the sound. Just great. Mike Moran= I can almost embrace the scene. It's vivid and natural at the same time. Toshio= After I read this, I feel sad, but I also will be “stone-still” someday. Hayashi= The scene tells me it is the end of summer. Iwamoto= I feel keenly the cicada’s strenuous effort to live. ##### This haiku is written by Maria [[6 votes]] inside heartbeats together Mykel Board= 3 words! This is one of those haiku that makes the reader work. It is worth the effort. Inside? Inside a house? The hearts inside the people? What do you see? The heartbeats are together. Are these lovers? People watching a horror movie? Two people? An audience? It's like reading a mystery, but readers have to use the clues to solve it themselves. Harada= I feel the “heart beats”. Yoshizawa= It’s a long time since I felt the beating of my heart. I wish I will feel it again sometimes. Jun= This bespeaks of an eidetic symbolism of romantic love. Love, to begin with, comes from within. And the partners who are in love - they live for each other. And depending on the depth and intensity of that love would be how they will, sort of, “sound” to each other and to those around them. It can be deafening and resounding; or can be quiet and disturbing, notwithstanding two hearts beating together. Yamamoto= This lets me imagine various things. ##### This haiku is written by Mike Kosiba [[5 votes]] After the downpour A garden snail on the road Lifted to safety Anamizu= I feel the writer’s love for a small insect and even I feel kindhearted. Sone= Nowadays snails can’t be seen even in the countryside where I live. Did the person lift it instinctively feeling pity for it? Mike Kosiba=- rain as the saviour! what a nice thought Yoshizawa= I am moved by the person’s careful attention toward the insect. Jun= Nature at work! And how nature sometimes take care of itself and its denizens. In a similar fashion, realities in life work in the same way where some people, most especially those who had not been reached by modern technology, would be totally dependent upon the work of nature (hopefully towards their favor); and upon which their very “safety,” nay even survival, depends upon. ##### This haiku is written by Ian

「句会実験第８回　選句結果リスト（その3）」

投稿者：ryo 投稿日：2008年10月30日(木)18時11分18秒

【２点句】 fruits turn to apricot color their harvest time 《吉澤》優雅に実りのときが実感できます。《ぬぬ太》実りの季節、収穫への感謝…今の季節に即した気持ちが読まれているように感じました。 ########作者は　林さん【２点句】 raindrops at the drying place―― break of the rainy season 《Mike Moran》A clear sign from mother nature that change is coming 《山本》at the より　on the の方が広がりがあるのでは？ ########作者は　吉澤さん【２点句】 So feel Be but Bee 《北村》蜂のBeな気分って、どんなかな？《田口》 ########作者は　敏夫さん【１点句】 to crossing the winds pampas grass’ the field look like the dancing 《林》秋の風の動き　爽やかさを　感じます。 ########作者は　曽根さん【１点句】 autumn breeze- turning around the moon bubbles on the water 《赤井》天上の月と地上の水の泡とその空間とを秋風が静かに穏やかに自然をおさめている風景が見えます。 ########作者は　masoumehさん【１点句】 hide-and-seek in green jungle with praying mantis 《敏夫》カマキリのあのスタイルは何となく不気味。美しい女性以外に私は捕まりたくない。 ########作者は　久保寺さん【１点句】 people dance all night long with oriental fiddles 《吉澤》生活の感情や地域性が伝わってくる「風の盆」のファンの一人です。胡弓の音色とともに音もなく流れる風…　艶があって惹かれます。 ########作者は　原田さん【１点句】 sparypaint signs the sky 《久保寺さん》のびのび、爽快な気持ちにしてくれます。 ########作者は　 Mike Kosibaさん

「句会実験第８回　選句結果リスト（その２）」

投稿者：ryo 投稿日：2008年10月30日(木)18時08分9秒

【４点句】 precious farewell summer white petals streaming with the breeze 《中村》夏の果ての儚さや寂しさを感じさせる。親しい友達との長い　　別れの時のあの切ない感じ。《赤井》precious の一言が白と風をひきしめている。《曽根》晩夏の淋しさに白い花びらを配したところが上手ですね《Mike Kosiba》- petals streaming away - powerful image & very real ########作者は　中山さん【４点句】 after the good-bye dimly-lit buildings dawn of a new day 《masoumeh》I like its contrasting parts. Man's goodbye and 　　　new day 's dawn . 《穴水》解説を見て心に残った。さよならと、新しい一日の始まり。　　一人の人生と、高層ビルに連想される多くの人の人生、という　　対比。読んだ人がそれぞれに想える句ではないでしょうか。《久保寺》深い悲しみの中にも明るい光が見えます。去りゆく者と　　生まれる物の対比が見事です。《Ian》I can picture the scene. A tryst ends in the early hours 　　　and a man walks home through deserted streets. ########作者は　Mariaさん【４点句】 raindrops staying on the leaves 《masoumeh》I can feel it. 《曽根》雨しずくが宝石の輝きと清潔感を出しています《Maria》雨粒が緑の葉の上で今にもこぼれ落ちそうな　　瞬間の美がうまく描かれいる句だと思います。《Jun》An interesting sight to behold …. and stretching that vision to imagine that those “raindrops,” when combined numerous times over, can become a body of water like the sea, ocean, etc. And here’s these humble droplets, clinging to the leaves, providing them with needed nourishment. Every little thing has a purpose, and some very little things have a potency for greatness, one way or the other ########作者は　岩本さん【４点句】 mountain passage the man with the machete and me 《Gene》《Mike Kosiba》- the unknown man adds a nice hint of mystery 《Maria》山深い道を距離をおいて見知らぬ人と自分だけ　が共有しているその空間、緑のにおい、人恋しさ（哀愁？）が感じられてとても素朴で味わいがある句だと思いました。《黒沢》自然と共に暮らす男の、物語性を感じ、面白い句と思った ########作者は　Mykelさん【４点句】 cicadas sing in the forest clouds far above 《穴水》近くに聞こえるせみの音（聴覚）と遠くに見える雲（視覚）の対比。視点がダイナミックに動き臨場感がある。《原田》蝉が鳴き雲が昇る景が見える《Jun》The stridulating cicadas provide a hypnotic background to the fresh smell of the forest trees and the floating sensation of being carried in the soft cushion of the clouds in the skies above. Indeed, there must be something in the “notes, pitch, frequency, etc.” of the sound produced by the “singing cicadas” which can act as a conduit along the path of one’s desire to explore the inner recesses of one’s soul. 《Ian》 Imagine, in the middle of a wood, looking up at the tall trees and hearing all around the sound of an invisible choir. ########作者は　吉澤さん【3点句】 the blue between clouds its smallness and its pureness 《敏夫》奥深く澄んだきれいな眼をしたやさしい看護師さんの姿を思い出しました。《林》雲の合間に　ちらりと見える　澄み切った青空吸い込まれていくような　深さがあります。《北村》作者はきっと空を見上げるのが好きなのでしょう。 ########作者は　ryoさん【3点句】 expanding space beyond stars the little earth 《原田》宇宙と地球の大きな景が詠えている《ぬぬ太》ビッグ・バン以降の、膨張する宇宙の雄大さが、すこぶる感じられる句です。母星が煌めくイメージが良い感じです《山本》但し３行目はthe little earth に代えてso small earth の方が宜しいかと思います。 ########作者は　中村さん【3点句】 vacancy after fireworks over sea 《林》花火の合間の　何とも言えない　静けさと　暗闇の感じが出ていると思います。《岩本》鮮やかな花火が散った後に残った闇の色合いが目に浮かびます《Maria》夜の海上に咲く大輪の花火の後の光や音の余韻がうまく詠まれていると思います。 ########作者は　中村さん【3点句】 forces from nowhere blows everywhere wind 《Mike Moran》The wind is alive - invisible but powerful 《黒沢》自然の力強さと平等さ。若者らしさを感じる《ryo》何処からともなく何処もかも吹くの表現が面白い。 ########作者は　Junさん【3点句】 only the quiet and the lengthening of shadows lovers embrace 《曽根》モノクロ映画の一場面がクローズアップされ　　影と静けさが暗示するものは？《久保寺》映画のワンシーンを見ているようです。《Ian》The approaching evening isolates this couple from the rest of the world. ########作者は　Geneさん【3点句】 Three old apple trees Windfall fruit slowly rotting Smell of vinegar 《Gene》《Mykel Board》This is delightful, first because of its originality: NOT an ADJECTIVE NOUN (e.g. old pond) first line, and the use of "windfall fruit," unusual words, but immediately understandable. Usually I don't like 5-7-5, but here it seems very natural. I also like it because of the sensory allusion to Basho's "sound of water." (smell of vinegar). It echoes without being too obvious. It's a great haiku. 《田口》 ########作者は　Ianさん【3点句】 chase of clouds in front of the moon tropical midnight 《中村》恋人と二人だけで月を見ている。二人には会話はなく、ただ月の周りには雲が追いかけっこをしている。丁度二人の心がお互いに追いかけっこをしているよう。《敏夫》midnightを真夜中＝午前０時と断定した日本語訳に何かわからないけど気持ちが入っているのかな？《山本》 ########作者は　中山さん【3点句】 summer Karuizawa murmuring and singing birds remind of CO2 problem 《北村》夏の軽井沢のさわやかさと現実的な問題が一緒に盛り込まれ、いいなぁと思いました。《ぬぬ太》ちょっと時事的過ぎですが、面白い句。こーゆーのもアリですね（笑）。《田口》 ########作者は　赤井さん

句会実験第８回　選句結果リスト

投稿者：ryo 投稿日：2008年10月30日(木)17時59分24秒

皆さんのご協力で、句会実験が終了しました。今回、外国人　６名も含めて、１８人の参加者でした。そして選句に際して、オープン選者（投句なしで選句のみ）が６人参加されました。今回の句会実験に関して、皆さんのコメントやご提案をいただければ有り難いと思います。　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　英語俳句クラブ　鈴木良亮句会実験選句結果リスト【１２点句】 listening to the rain a rose 《中村》雨に濡れた薔薇の花弁が目に浮かぶ。想いが募る感じである。《masoumeh》I like its simplicity and beauty. A rose is like a poet here. 《穴水》雨の中、少しうなだれたようなバラを「雨音を聞いている」と感じたのが素敵。グレーの背景に鮮やかな一輪のバラと雨のしずくが思い浮かび、一枚の絵を見るよう。《中山》部屋の中に飾られた一本のバラと作者が静かな充実した時間を過ごしている様子が伺われます。《Mykel Board》This one is minimal, but deep. The lack of punctuation lends the depth. At first, it seems that the haiku writer is listening to the rain, then suddenly notices the rose. But it could also be the rose, listening to the rain in its own way. 《M. Moran》A sombre and reflective moment. The rose provides contrast to the falling rain. 《曽根》雨に濡れているバラの瑞々しさと雨音で明るい句《原田》雨音に薔薇一輪が似合う《岩本》生き生きとしたバラの様子がうかがえます。《Maria》とても簡潔で詠んですぐに１枚の絵（シーン）が目に浮か　　びました。薄暗い部屋のテーブルの上に１輪の薔薇の花がそこ　　だけ明るく浮かび上がり窓の外では静かな雨音が、、。《久保寺》湿った雨の匂いの中に、バラの香りが漂ってきました。《山本》 ########作者は　ryoさん【７点句】 asleep at the beach on my chest my book outlined in sunburn 《Gene》《穴水》ユーモラスな状況が思い浮かんで、面白い。《中山》今年は猛暑だったので日焼け対策が大変でした。本の輪郭の　　白い膚は困りましたね。でも面白いです。《北村》水着の跡でなくて本の輪郭というのがおもしろいです。《Jun》The lure of summer is irresistible for someone who works hard during the regular time of the year. In such a situation, reading an interesting book becomes secondary to the joy that one wallows in like getting baked under the sun, and leaving the book either on one’s chest or face. In this fast-paced society, indeed one needs the time to take off from stress-laden work in order to relax and enjoy the fruits of one’s labor. 《田口》《ryo》この浜辺は、耐えられぬ暑さではなくて、むしろ涼風の　　気持ち良さ。 ########作者は　Mykel Boardさん【７点句】 august heat littering the beach jelly fish 《Mykel Board》An interesting change in perception. Too many haiku are only pretty pictures. Nature is nice. But here we see nature as "litter," not nice. A very original point of view. 《原田》８月の暑さが海月（くらげ）で救われた《Mike Kosiba》Litter in a haiku - GREAT! 《岩本》夏の暑さを感じさせないクラゲの動きがおもしろいですね。《田口》《Ian》Jellyfish, which once moved gracefully in the sea, now lie helpless on the sand. 《ryo》浜辺に散らばる海月（くらげ）が、夏の暑さを増幅している。 ########作者は　Geneさん【７点句】 on the stone pavement stone-still cicada late in summer 《中村》「静かさや岩に沁みいる蝉の声」を思い出す。やはり暑さが耳　　から身体から受ける。《Gene》《Mykel Board》Again we don't start ADJECTIVE NOUN first line. (All too common in English-language haiku).　Again we have an allusion to a famous haiku, this one about the sound of a cicada coming from a rock. But this is different. NOT from the rock, but from the pavement. NOT a sound, but a cicada without the sound. Just great. 《Mike Moran》I can almost embrace the scene. It's vivid and natural at the same time. 《敏夫》物悲しい、でも私もいつかは・・・・・《林》夏の終わりを知らせる　情景です《岩本》懸命に生きた蝉の力強さをひしひしと感じます ########作者は　Mariaさん【６点句】 melting into hot water heat of the day 《赤井》いやなはずの夏の暑さと、お風呂のあつさとがとけあって　　さりげなく違和感なく表現されているのがすばらしい《中山》今年の夏の暑さは毎日毎日が戦いのようでした。湯舟の中にも　　溶け出すような暑さを体感しました。《岩本》暑い一日が終わり、また新しい一日が始まるといったすがすが　　しい思いにさせてくれる句だと思います《黒沢》一日を感謝し、明日へ向かう健康な人間の姿を感じる《ぬぬ太》句として良いのかなぁ？と疑問に思いつつも、共感×２《ryo》一日の暑さが湯舟の熱い湯に溶けていくとは独自の表現アプ　　ローチ。 ########作者は　久保寺さん【６点句】 inside heartbeats together 《Mykel Board》3 words! This is one of those haiku that makes the reader work. It is worth the effort. Inside? Inside a house? The hearts inside the people? What do you see? The heartbeats are together. Are these lovers? People watching a horror movie? Two people? An audience? It's like reading a mystery, but readers have to use the clues to solve it themselves. 《原田》心臓の鼓動が伝わってくる《吉澤》とんと遠ざかっている心のときめき。時には欲しいものです。《黒沢》今　自分が生きている　という感動がつたわる《Jun》This bespeaks of an eidetic symbolism of romantic love. Love, to begin with, comes from within. And the partners who are in love - they live for each other. And depending on the depth and intensity of that love would be how they will, sort of, “sound” to each other and to those around them. It can be deafening and resounding; or can be quiet and disturbing, notwithstanding two hearts beating together. 《山本》色々な想像を誘います。 ########作者は　Mike Kosibaさん【５点句】 boys’ dream at the Koshien ballpark burning sun 《masoumeh》it's like a film. Although it's short but it's 　 unending in my mind. 《赤井》あつい夢と太陽と若さが同時に強く熱く感じられます。《中山》少年の夢は酷暑に負けず力強いです。スポーツは　　人間の身体も心も鍛え上げてくれます。《林》甲子園での　炎天下での球児の活躍　burning sunが効果的です。《Mike Kosiba》- do dreams come any more powerful than this? ########作者は　原田さん【５点句】 morning glory gives a sip of drop to a busy bee 《masoumeh》《中山》朝顔の露は甘くて美味しそうです。ビロードのような花の上で　　働き蜂は元気を取り戻した事でしょう。《Mike Moran》The morning is both beautiful and generous. A delightfully complex evocation of an everyday sight 《久保寺》朝顔の思いやりを見つめる作者の優しい眼差しを感じました。《ryo》擬人化された朝顔の愛情表現。 ########作者は　赤井さん【５点句】 HAPPY make Happy Be HAPPY 《中村》語呂が良く幸せな気分にしてくれる。幸せになれる。幸せに溢れている。《赤井》短い文の中に直線的にとにかくHAPPYの気持が伝わってきます。《北村》いつも口ずさんでいたいような句です。《吉澤》日頃の存在に感謝、そこから幸せが広がる。そのように思っています。《黒沢》日本の方の句でしょうか？　しっとりした日本的な　し・あ・わ・せ・を感じます ########作者は　敏夫さん【５点句】 After the downpour A garden snail on the road Lifted to safety 《穴水》小さなものをいとおしむ愛が感じられて、こちらまで思わず優しい気持ちになる。《曽根》私の住む田舎でさえ蝸牛がみられなくなりました。　　こんなところにと思わず拾いあげたのでしょうか《Mike Kosiba》- rain as the saviour! what a nice thought 《吉澤》どしゃ降りのあと、気配りのsafetyがこころに優しく響いてきます。《Jun》 Nature at work! And how nature sometimes take care of itself and its denizens. In a similar fashion, realities in life work in the same way where some people, most especially those who had not been reached by modern technology, would be totally dependent upon the work of nature (hopefully towards their favor); and upon which their very “safety,” nay even survival, depends upon. ########作者は　Ianさん【５点句】 far away cicada's singing summer evening 《Gene》《Maria》行く夏を名残惜しむかのような遠くから聞こえる少し弱さを感じる蝉の声、、、。聞き手（作り手）と蝉のその時を共感している様子が感じて好きです。《ぬぬ太》蝉の声って、季節に別れを告げているように感じられ、少年時代を懐古。《山本》《Ian》Listening to distant cicadas is one of the delights of summer 　　in Japan. ########作者は　岩本さん

句会実験８.選句リスト（ここから「日本語での説明部分」を列記

投稿者：ryo 投稿日：2008年 9月25日(木)16時25分49秒

１） BEな気分の蜂なの２）雲間に見ゆる青の小ささ清らかさ３）星々のひろがる宇宙と小（ち）さき地球４）父の亡くなった明け方の空が目に焼き付いて。高層ビル群の影がぼんやりと浮かび上がっていました。５）影の静けさと長さ　恋人たちが抱擁する６）幸せにきっと幸せに７）雨音に耳傾けるバラ一輪８）海上の花火の後の深き闇９）石畳の上　じっと動かぬ蝉　夏の終わり－－－１０）八月の暑さ　浜辺に散らばる海月（くらげ）１１）越中おわら節１２）蝉の大合唱１３）惜別の晩夏　白い花びらが風の吹くままに去って行く１４）物干し場に雨だれが跳ねている　梅雨晴れ１５）山の道　鉈（なた）もつ男と共に行く１６）高校野球１７）アンズの実１８）月の前を雲たちの追跡ごっこ　酷暑の午前０時１９）蝉が鳴く森の上を　高々と昇る雲２０）浜辺での　うたた寝　日焼けした胸に本の輪郭２１）長き夜や友へ手紙書く２２）朝顔のジャングルでカマキリとかくれんぼ２３）内に心臓の鼓動２４）雨あがり　葉の上に集まる　しずくたち２５）何処からともなく何処もかも吹く力　風２６）芒原を渡る風はダンスをしている様に見える２７）夏の一日が湯舟に溶けていく２８）スプレイペンキが空にサイン２９）夏の午後遠くで聞こえるセミの声３０）色とりどりの　まだらの花火で明るくなる静かな暗い空３１）せせらぎに鳥の歌に CO2 問題を思う　夏の軽井沢３２）秋の風　月をめぐる　水の上の泡３３）どしゃ降りの後　路上のカタツムリが拾いあげられる３４）朝顔の一露　一ぴきの働きバチに　くれてやり３５）三本の林檎の古木　風で落ちた実が次第に朽ちていくビネガーの匂い 888888888888888888 ryo 88888888888888888

句会実験8.選句リスト（最初に haiku のみを列記）

投稿者：ryo 投稿日：2008年 9月25日(木)16時23分35秒

今回、外国人　６名も含めて、１８人の参加者でした。最初に haiku のみを列記しました。後の方に、同じ番号を使って「日本語での説明部分」を列記しております。ご自分の２句を外して、次のリストの中から、それぞれの方が５句を選んで下さい。　例えば、 4）after the good-bye 14）raindrops　 22）hide-and-seek 29) far away 32) autumn breeze-- このように書いて、その結果を私の方へお送りください。出来ましたら、選句のコメントを書いてください。締めきりは　　　10月２５日まで。なお、選句の際は、特に英語の句、眼で読むだけでなく、声を出して読んでみてください。リズム感は haiku の場合でも重要だと思います。 1) So feel Be but Bee 2) the blue between clouds its smallness and its pureness 3) expanding space beyond stars the little earth 4) after the good-bye dimly-lit buildings dawn of a new day 5) only the quiet and the lengthening of shadows lovers embrace 6) HAPPY make Happy Be HAPPY 7) listening to the rain a rose 8) vacancy after fireworks over sea 9) on the stone pavement stone-still cicada late in summer 10) august heat littering the beach jelly fish 11) people dance all night long with oriental fiddles 12) cicadas enjoy the chills before dawn with a noisy chorus 13) precious farewell summer white petals streaming with the breeze 14) raindrops at the drying place―― break of the rainy season 15) mountain passage the man with the machete and me 16) boys’ dream at the Koshien ballpark burning sun 17) fruits turn to apricot color their harvest time 18) chase of clouds in front of the moon tropical midnight 19) cicadas sing in the forest clouds far above 20) asleep at the beach on my chest my book outlined in sunburn 21) in the long autumn night write a letter for a friend 22) hide-and-seek in green jungle with praying mantis 23) inside heartbeats together 24) raindrops staying on the leaves 25) forces from nowhere blows everywhere wind 26) to crossing the winds pampas grass’ the field look like the dancing 27) melting into hot water heat of the day 28) sparypaint signs the sky 29) far away cicada's singing summer evening 30) quiet dark skies brighten with colorful dapple fireworks 31) summer Karuizawa murmuring and singing birds remind of CO2 problem 32) autumn breeze- turning around the moon bubbles on the water 33) After the downpour A garden snail on the road Lifted to safety 34) morning glory gives a sip of drop to a busy bee 35) Three old apple trees Windfall fruit slowly rotting Smell of vinegar 888888888888888888 ryo 88888888888888888

蝉の haiku

投稿者：ryo 投稿日：2008年 9月 5日(金)16時02分39秒

今年の蝉の haiku ばかり、８句を今日 haiku & ryo のブログに発表しました。コメントをいただけると嬉しいな。 ryo

早や９月、（中秋）秋半ばの頃

投稿者：mako 投稿日：2008年 9月 4日(木)16時23分14秒

　８月６日は広島の原爆忌、陰暦の七夕、だったかと思います。灼熱の無風の中で亡くなっていった人々を思いました。朝凪や　参道にひかる　蟻の列　　　　　　　　　　　　８月６日　御殿場にて子供が小さい頃に、何度か８月の初めに山中湖に避暑にいきました。湖畔のベンチに寝そべって夜空を眺めてていると、星が次から次に降ってきて、奔放な空想にふけったものでした。６３回広島の原爆の日６３回　終戦記念日防災の日　関東大震災から８５年早や９月、（中秋）秋半ばの頃となりました。いろいろな思いが交錯します。　　　ｍａｋｏ

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